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Sunday, October 9, 2011

GhoulsGalore: Presence

This is my first entry to Lady Antimony's GhoulsGalore challenge. For every week in October, there's a word and a being, and you write a story of 250 words. This week the word was 'boustrophedonic' and the being a poltergeist.

The slender fingers ran across the words written in boustrophedonic fashion. From right to left, then left to right, the archaeologist read them in her mind. The site had an otherworldly feel; it belonged to another era, its inhabitants long gone. She could almost imagine whispers on the faint wind.
Speak. Speak the words, it seemed to say. A rock rolled to her feet. She whispered one of the words, a tremor of excitement running through her. They had deciphered some of the meanings. It seemed to be a guide or a map, but a symbolic one; it spoke of stars, darkness and signs left by the gods.
Speak the words. I need to find a way out.
Another rock rolled down into the ruins. Were her comrades playing a joke on her?
Please don’t leave me here!
She walked back out into the humid air and tangle of strange plants, but the chill of the shadow cast by the wall clung to her. One of her colleagues ran up to her, his face distorted by disbelief and anger.
“The bloody idiots cut off our funding! We’ll leave in a couple of weeks.”
“Maybe it’s best,” she whispered. Upon entering the site she had felt dread. With every day, the feeling had grown deeper. There was something amiss in this place, something stamped its presence here.

6 comments:

  1. Oooooh, this was wonderfully creepy! You do a lovely job of evoking a sense of uneasiness, as well. I really enjoyed this. :D

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  2. Very tense and filled with questions that need to be answered. I hope you explore this in the future, great write!

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  3. I liked the whispers in the air and the way she felt uneasy about being in the presence of the site.

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  4. I love the creepy atmosphere you generated here, and that the archaeologist DIDN'T read the words! So refreshing, and for the flowers 'n' sunshine guy that I am preferable, to have the malignant force thwarted at least for now...
    Unless it was an innocent victim trapped by a malignant force and she opted not to help them... Though even then, I respect her discretion in matters unknown.

    Favorite thing was the subtlety of the piece, especially with the stones merely rolling down instead of outright flying.

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  5. Creepy atmosphere.

    "it spoke of stars, darkness and signs left by the gods." - My favourite line :).

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